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Tuesday, 25 June 2019

perswade leter



24 June

Dear: mum and dad

Woof woof a dog would be a good part of the family mum and dad I will walk and feed it.

The dog wood be garet cause the family needs some fun in our life and Tobey Neika Tim and Dlyan are annoying some times and. If they are annoying I can play with the dog and not them


I hope you can realize that the family needs a dog.

Sincerely
Benaiah
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4 comments:

  1. Anonymous27 June 2019 at 09:46

    Hi benaiah its brodie.I enjoyed the part when you said woof woof.Did you think about putting full stops.Why did you but this up.

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  2. Anonymous27 June 2019 at 10:03

    Hi Benaiah.

    I like your story. I like the way you put it on your blog.did you think about it before you did it? why did you put it on your blog for?

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  3. Anonymous27 June 2019 at 10:03

    Dear Benaiah.

    I liked you story you made and i liked the part where you put All you siblings and said they are Annoying Maybe next time you Could Add a Bit more information and Add more Writing

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  4. Miss Rowland27 June 2019 at 12:25

    Kia Ora Benaiah! Your letter has all the things needed in a persuasive letter - great job! I think you used a great sound hook to convince your mum and dad. Next time, you should add one to two more reasons to be super convincing!

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